Sunday, 27 September 2009

mary king's close

Let me tell you a story I was told when I was your age. Yes little girl’s and boy’s I know that this may be hard for you to understand, however it starts off like this. Many years ago when I was your age, I had a friend as you would say, His name was Sean Scully and he was one of those people who where really annoying, and really eager or keen to find out about what he wanted.

When he was five years of age his mother had past away for some reason i could never understand. He never really talked about it, and whenever the topic came up about his mother passing away, he would always change the subject or completely not talk. Im pretty sure you could hear his thoughts since it was that quiet. Well eighteen years have gone past and not a single word about his mother. The first time he talked about his mother was on the first day of his job. All he said was that he knew how and what killed his mum. Well he was pretty shore what killed his mum. He said it was a ghost, a ghost of his past life, a ghost of his past life haunting him for ever.

Well after a few months of working, he realized that he needed something or had to do something that would make his life not boring. He realized that he would go to mary king’s close. He now knew that if he wanted to make his life more interesting he would go to this place and make a difference to his life. He knew that many people have died and that many many people have gotten so scared they have just abandoned the tour that they are on and have just left.

On the way there he realized that if he did go, he didn’t want to be let down he didn’t want to get proven wrong, because if he did he would look so stupid. About 3 hours from his final destination, he started changing his mind, he knew that before he would arrive at this place called mary king’s close, there would be something or someone that would make him change his mind. However he stuck to his mind and still went for it. 

At the front entrance of mary king’s close, this huge castle was nothing was he expected this dark, gloomy, mysterious place was totally different than the pictures he saw on the internet. He never knew that seeing something, could  be so much more different than seeing a picture. After he entered this huge castle, he was actually quite scared himself, even though he was a skeptic, one of those guy who are not scared or afraid of anything.

This two our tour was nothing like he expected he said it was more boring than anything he had ever experienced. Every thing that he thought good about this trip, was going to be a huge disappointment. As soon as the tour was over he was going to leave, however after  a huge disappointment he decided to look around and was going to see if anything was fake or a set up.

He now realized what he was doing was wrong however, he thought it was for a good cause. After not being frightened at all he did staredt feeling nervous, he was at a point where the path was to dark and it was far to dangerous for anyone to walk on. at the back of his eyes he saw a white shadow just standing and watching him. He was so scared that he ran straight into darkness and kept on running. After running in darkness for five minutes he finally finds an exit where he see’s every one else on the tour laughing at him because he was crying. 

He now feels like a complete idiot and wishes he had never done that. It was all a set up, that is how they earn there money. The end, but you know kids I wasn’t told this story I was the one that this happened to. I completely regret it and thats why i quite my job. My name is Sean Scully and I am twenty three years old i know realize that there is more too life than trying to achieve something that you don’t want to do. Thats why I gave up my dream to find out what killed my mum. I was being stupid and i totally regret it.

1 comment:

  1. its a great story, however you got quite a lot of mistakes.
    Some of the words, such as SHORE, it should be SURE
    Some Gramatic mistakes as well
    And when you say "i", it should be in capital
    At the start, when you said "yes little boys and girls", you shouldn't say that, because this isn't a speech, its supposed to be a story.
    But overall, its a good story

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